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When a Hercules bank plane crash lands in the desert, a young experienced gunslinger and his brothers must battle against an assortment of mercenaries down a long desert road to get to the money first before the military arrive.
I don't necessarily thing of gunslingers as old west, but the logline could stand for more vibrant adjectives. Also, does it need to be a Hercules plane? And do these assortment of mercenaries have a reason to be there? Are…
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When her favorite dream-streamer stops sharing his dreams, a rigid executive must help him dream again to win the contract of her life before her nightmares destroy her temper.
I'm probably suffering from a lack of context because I'm not exactly sure what a dreamstreamer is (is it a sentient being?), but the male/female back and forth (her favorite/help him/if she) is throwing me off.
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A marked-for-death outlaw rekindles old Dixie Mafia blood feuds after returning to the rogue barrier island of Vengeance on a mission to reclaim what?s his and kill the dirty motherfucker who gunned him down, stole his girl, and built a cocaine empire in the lawless coastal town he once called home.
And by the way, thank you all for your feedback. I know this certainly isn't a movie for everyone, kind of a niche market project, but the input does help.
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A marked-for-death outlaw rekindles old Dixie Mafia blood feuds after returning to the rogue barrier island of Vengeance on a mission to reclaim what?s his and kill the dirty motherfucker who gunned him down, stole his girl, and built a cocaine empire in the lawless coastal town he once called home.
Really, the inciting incident is the return to a hometown where he already has bad blood. His motivation is that his girl is getting weary of life on the road as a drifting grifter and her ex comes with a…
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A marked-for-death outlaw rekindles old Dixie Mafia blood feuds after returning to the rogue barrier island of Vengeance on a mission to reclaim what?s his and kill the dirty motherfucker who gunned him down, stole his girl, and built a cocaine empire in the lawless coastal town he once called home.
No. That's not what I said. I said his girl's ex comes to them (not him) with the job. The catching point was that it takes place in this town where he's already marked for death. So it takes some…
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A marked-for-death outlaw rekindles old Dixie Mafia blood feuds after returning to the rogue barrier island of Vengeance on a mission to reclaim what?s his and kill the dirty motherfucker who gunned him down, stole his girl, and built a cocaine empire in the lawless coastal town he once called home.
His girl's ex comes to them with a job to rob a pair of drug couriers. He doesn't want to return, with a little convincing, the rewards outweighed the risk, so he does and he's double crossed.
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A marked-for-death outlaw rekindles old Dixie Mafia blood feuds after returning to the rogue barrier island of Vengeance on a mission to reclaim what?s his and kill the dirty motherfucker who gunned him down, stole his girl, and built a cocaine empire in the lawless coastal town he once called home.
Hmmm... While I do agree that my initial logline was a bit wordy (and I included the town name against my better judgement), the environment and his history there do play a key part and is essentially a character in…
