A mute street performer with PTSD, trapped and on the run in war-torn Europe, must use his wits and talents, and enlist the help of the French Resistance, to change the course of the second World War.

Both the new log line and the original give the impression this is a big story with lots of moving parts. ?But at it's heart this feels like a story about a mute guy trying to tell people about concentration camps. ?I think if you focus on that you'll hook your audience and get your message across.

New Logline:

Inflicted with PTSD from a young age, a mute street performer is abandoned by his troupe as France becomes occupied by the Nazi Wehrmacht. Faced with the choice to escape to neutral Switzerland or fight, he joins the French Resistance as a code-breaker and infiltrates the Nazi regime. His tactics shift when he learns what's happening to the countless civilians going missing.

>>>to change the course of the second World War.

I agree with Richiev that this ought to be dropped. ?Unless, the character has a very specific objective goal, a very specific -- and unique -- plan ?for changing the course of the war. ?Like Alan Turing did in "The Imitation Game". ?His very specific objective goal was to crack the Nazi Enigma code. ?And his very specific -- and unique plan -- for achieving that goal was to build a calculating machine, a primitive computer.

And the bonus feature of that film?is that it was based on a ?real character, real history, the work of the British code crackers at Blenchley Park. ?Is this story based on a real character, on a real episode in World War II?