After a member of the Gonzo Girls unexpectedly dies; Santana, Veronica, Shoshana, and Olympia must stop the advertisers from cancelling their show on the fledgling pop-culture network by Sweeps Week.

The last revision of the logline is very?wordy,?and?describes too few plot points.

I direct?you?to my original comments, describe a single main character with a single goal. ?Also, no names should be mentioned in the logline, unless it's a biopic or based on widely known historical events.

Here is a formula for you to use, stick to this structure when constructing your next draft:

After an out of the ordinary and significant event happens to a flawed main character, he or she are motivated to take a specific action in order to accomplish a compelling goal.

Hey ComplexMuse,

For now, make one of those characters the MC. So, you have the inciting incident; a Gonzo Girls member dies, so your chosen MC must stop the group's sponsor from cancelling their biggest show--there, the main course of action.

But, why? What would be the MC's goal? To honor her fallen Gonzo Girl?

Good luck with this!

This is to vague and complex to pass as a logline. Best you review the Training tab up top to see what the critical components of a logline are.

But to get you started on? your road to logline perfection:

Who is the main character?

What does he or she want?

What is preventing them from getting what they want?

Answer ONLY the above questions in a single sentance, and we will be able to help you construct a logline from that.