“A fateful accident tries to separate a love without limits between an emerging artist and a promising lawyer, but fate and science will help that love to continue living in one body to fulfill the dreams of both.”

2 reviews

mrliteral Samurai · 2,660 pts

Doesn't tell us what the story is, who the people involved are,? what they want, or what's stopping them. Protagonist, antagonist, conflict stakes. Also, how can an accident try to do something? It's a non-entity. The whole thing is vague and unclear. Give us specifics.

Leon Davis Logliner · 958 pts

It is vague and needs the major elements - Mains character, Antagonist, an Event and the MC's Actions in response to the Event.

How about, "Wen sn accident kills a budding romance a young artist fights to unite with his lawyer girlfriend by ... kidnapping her from hospital to ................or .........................."