A disgraced coach gets a second chance but must teach couch potato kids about baseball and life to win a championship trophy, a trophy wife, and the apple of his eye.

2 reviews

Grumpy Penpusher · 24 pts

This feels a little unfocused. Perhaps rearrange it terms of goals and obstacles - A disgraced coach gets a second chance at success and love, but first they must deal with couch potato kid players, stiff competition, etc.

RandyG Penpusher · 106 pts

Aren't you giving away the ending??? Maybe say "as he pursues" or "in pursuit of" a championship trophy, etc.