A decorated officer must apprehend his son, an escaped convict.

by theplaneteers Penpusher · 61 pts 284 views

4 reviews

NinaS Penpusher · 191 pts

I agree with Mike and Gianni's above points. It sounds intriguing, but as it is, we don't know? what the inciting incident is, which is what Mike is saying in his comment above. What happens to the decorated officer to make him chase his convicted son? Is it to save him from self-destruction or being killed by someone?

Looking forward to seeing this develop further! Good luck with it :)

giannisggeorgiou Mentor · 4,754 pts

I can definitely see the conflict here.

However, if you tried using the formula, you would tell us more about how the story evolves, all within the 25-35 words required. Moreover, it would help you discover things about your story.

giannisggeorgiou Mentor · 4,754 pts

I can definitely see the conflict here.

However, if you tried using the formula, you would tell us more about how the story evolves, all within the 25-35 words required. Moreover, it would help you discover things about your story.