A dark comedy about racism set during the Cronulla riots.

UNTITLED AUSTRALIAN PROJECT

3 reviews

Quikoni 0 pts

Both comments are valid. Nothing else needs to be said.

sharkeatingman 0 pts

Smething odd about the word "comedy" in the same sentence as "racisim" and "riots", but if Brooks can do a Nazi musical, I guess anything's possible.

As a logline, it's missing most of the elements, except of course, the genre, which was clearly stated (unnecessarily so). No sense of protagonist, antagonist, goal, obstacles, stakes, etc. Basically, just a TV guide entry.

The writer needs to learn the basics of a logline, and the Australian Film Project board, or whomever is funding this stuff, needs to improve their standards a bit. If the logline is this bad, I cannot imagine what the script is like.

Geno Scala- judge.

hospas Penpusher · 128 pts

You need to imply who is the protagonist, their goal, who is the antagonist and what the story is about. Eg As racial tensions in Cronulla develop into a fight, Joe tries to organise his troops, stay alive and not to beat up his fiance's brother who is the leader of the opposing gang. No exactly a great logline or anything that relates to your story but an example of how one could incorporate the elements and indicate what type of film it is.