A covert agent is wanted for his wife's murder and branded a terrorist. With the world on the brink of collapse and a rogue agent wanting war. He has limited time to find her murderer, the rogue agent and uncover a shocking truth that would bring the world to it's knees.

Thank you... :D

You're welcome, good luck with your script!

Thank you.

I do like your changes and will be using that one. :)

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After a covert agent?s branded a terrorist, he has forty-eight hours to stop the perpetrators of a conspiracy that?ll frame him for a new World War.
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I want to thank you and dpg so much for all your help. It is very much appreciated:)

The treatment is complete, not long started the screenplay. I just wanted to see if people like the idea of the story. :)

A good rewrite! Nice job :)

Some very minor changes:
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After a covert agent's branded a terrorist, he has forty-eight hours to stop the perpetrators of a conspiracy that'll frame him for a new World War.
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I think you have almost got this one down?

"Is this written? Or are you testing the idea by first creating a logline?

Revision 4: When a covert agent is branded a terrorist, he has forty-eight hours to find the perpetrators of a conspiracy that will frame him for a new World War.

I like it. I have created another with a mixture of everything discussed :D

Your logline is much better. How about this, a mixture of your last logline attempt and mine.
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Wanted for murder and branded a terrorist, a covert agent has 48 hours to clear his name and stop a rogue Agent hell-bent on triggering World War three.?
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I think Richiev's version is a definite improvement. Here is my revision of his version:

When a covert agent is branded a terrorist, he has 24 hours to stop the real terrorists from perpetrating the conspiracy he is accused of: triggering a nuclear war.

Ideally, a logline is about the sizzle -- not the steak. Is the sizzle that he's wanted for the murder of his wife? Is that what makes the story unique, different, gives it a twist? I don't think so. I think it's part of the meat -- the plot, an additional complication.

To me, the sizzle is that he's suspected of planning the very deed he's trying to prevent. That's what stands out,hooks my interest-- not the murder.

The murder is relevant to the objective goal (stop the conspiracy) IF and ONLY IF the murder is directly, causally linked to the conspiracy. Even then, it's a link he's will discover in the course of trying to stop the conspiracy. Solving his wife's murder would be nice, but it is not the primary goal. He has a more important, more pressing mission to worry about than clearing his name: he's got only 24 hours to save the world.

So I suggest that the logline focus on the primary objective goal, stopping the conspiracy, and save the murder reveal for the script.

fwiw.

Revision3: A covert Agent is wanted for his wife?s murder and branded a terrorist. He has only forty-eight hours to clear his name, and to find a rogue Agent hell-bent on revealing a secret that could start a New World War.

Thank you... More revision :D

I think the problem with the logline is it reads like a list of events instead of a story. As a result, while it is informative, it doesn't draw the reader in.

Here is your latest revision. It's an improvement over the original:

Revised Version 2.1: A covert agent is wanted for his wife?s murder and branded a terrorist. He must with limited time, find a rogue agent that will reveal a shocking truth about his motives.?

I would change it a bit though.
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"Wanted for murder and branded a terrorist, a covert agent has 24 hours to clear his name and stop two factions who wish to trigger WW3"
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Hope that helped, good luck with this!

Revised Version 2: "A covert agent is wanted for his wife's murder and branded a terrorist. He must with limited time, find a rogue agent that will uncover a shocking truth about his motives."

Revised Version 2.1: A covert agent is wanted for his wife?s murder and branded a terrorist. He must with limited time, find a rogue agent that will reveal a shocking truth about his motives.?

It isn't Nuclear War... :) ;)

Better. You got a ticking clock. How about something along the lines of : "A covert agent wanted for his wife?s murder and branded a terrorist must..."

"solve/find"-- the MacGuffin or objective goal
"before/ or else" -- the stakes, what happens if he fails; I'm guessing it's nuclear war

How can the objective goal be a "shocking truth about himself"? By definition, that shocking truth is unknown to him at the start of the story, right--he's clueless? So he can't know at the end of Act 1 (which is when the protagonist locks into the objective goal) that he's supposed to be looking for it.

Rather it's something he discovers in the course of pursuing his objective goal. Like Detective Jake Gittes in "Chinatown". At the end of Act 1 he wants to know why the L.A.. water commissioner "drowned" in a reservoir. That's his objective goal.

In course of his investigation to solve that ONE case, he uncovers "shocking truths" about the L.A. water supply, about L.A. City bureaucrats, about shady property deals in the Northwest Valley, about obituaries in the local paper, about the Albacore Club, about a missing young girl everyone wants to find, about his client turned lover.

Revised Version: "A covert agent is wanted for his wife's murder and branded a terrorist. With the world on the brink of war, he has limited time to find a rogue agent that will uncover a shocking truth about himself."

Thank you for your input. I see your points. I will go ahead and revise... Back soon :)