A couple of cynical fixers from different ends of the political spectrum exploit a series of grisly killings that take place during an increasingly bitter election campaign.

Truth is stranger than fiction.? And more interesting.? I just don't see anything in this logline that can top what is currently going on in American politics.? ?(I presume the story in set in the US of A.)

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Thanks Mike.? Some good points there but there one thing I am not going to do is lower the cynicism level. Our politics is at a pretty revolting stage and I want to reflect that.

I'd consider making one of the two fixers the protagonist and writing the logline from their perspective (as Richiev has done). This way, there's a clear protagonist and antagonist which always helps to solidify a story in the reader's mind. It's also good to understand which of the two we're supposed to be rooting for to come out on top.?I'd also consider making one cynical and the other idealistic perhaps? The opposing characteristics can add another layer of conflict. In a bid to make the protagonist more likeable, perhaps don't have them resorting to despicable methods in order to achieve their goal - however, as long as the protagonist takes a slightly higher road than the antagonist you can get away with a lot!

What's the goal here? White House? Just elected official? Give us a tangible goal that we can visual.

I'd recommend watching Ides of March (2011) and obviously TV shows like The West Wing and House of Cards.