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Thank You Very Much :)
Nir Shelter
I'll try my best at improving the Logline.
Confusing.
This s a boy meets girl comedy, right? The MC is a boy, but what is his defining characteristic? "...boy..." is vague and lacks detail.
Why does he decide to steal the teath? What motivates him? How will that help him get the girl?
The witches seem unrelated, can you tie them into the plot more? Otherwise I suggest cutting them out of the logline.