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When his mother dies in his arms, an insomniac paramedic abandons the scene of the car accident that claimed her to wander the city streets in search of his estranged siblings.
This is confusing to me, it sounds like this man leaves his dead mother and then just wanders aimlessly through the streets hoping to bump into estranged siblings. If that is not the story maybe try using the word after…
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Running away from domestic violence in 1920s Oklahoma, a teenager encounters homelessness, alcoholism and drug addiction. Sent to prison, then declared insane, an encounter with a book changes his life
Maybe there is a descriptor that can be used to cover "homelessness, alcoholism and drug addiction" so that you don't have a laundry list, so to speak,? within your logline.
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A lonely man in witness protection receives word that his estranged father is dying, and so he must travel back to his home state without being detected by those who want him dead, in order to say goodbye before his father?s time is up.
An intricate concept,? sounds like a series of increasingly troubling events but what is the climax. His father is dying, he's trying to stay hidden and... This logline seems to be missing something in my opinion.
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Charles needs to rebuild his relationship with his son. Michael needs to stop Zoe from having their baby, whilst Andrew needs to get Rachael pregnant! And Jason has a secret that is going to shock everyone. The brotherhood is about to become the Fatherhood. And its likely there will be some casualties along the way.
The storyline? is unique it feels like there would be many different angles going at once, and the foreshadowing is excellent. But covering all the characters in detail in a logline seems like to much, maybe a descriptor like "a…
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A married man pretends to be a lesbian girl on Internet to fantasize with another girl. When she is killed the police starts to investigate on her virtual acquaintances so the private life of the man goes in troubles.
This is interesting and feels like it could be an intense thriller. But the logline feels bulky. If it can be consolidated into one sentence that might help.
