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A determined boy separated from his newfound sweetheart must cross the Bass Strait and come to the rescue before Tasmania is destroyed by rising sea levels.

July 3, 2013
When a young boy concludes rising sea levels will sink his dream island Tasmania, he must engage all strength to swim and fly to his paradise before time runs out.

June 27, 2013
Determined and short of money, a young boy aims to swim and fly to his dream paradise on the wildest island of Tasmania.

June 26, 2013
Determined to experience the wildest paradise on the island of Tasmania, one will do anything to find a way.

June 24, 2013

on A determined boy separated from his newfound sweetheart must cross the Bass Strait and come to the rescue before Tasmania is destroyed by rising sea levels.

Does it matter that in the film the boy only thinks that Tasmania is about to be destroyed by rising sea levels. Tasmania is not actually about to be destroyed.
on A determined boy separated from his newfound sweetheart must cross the Bass Strait and come to the rescue before Tasmania is destroyed by rising sea levels.

YAY!... The boy is about eight years old, as is the girl. B8C- The hero's flaw (eg fear of water), I assume, wouldn't go in the logline, but is something I cld add to the story.
on An independent twenty-something woman buys her first house, only to have her father show up on her doorstep announcing that he's left her mother and is moving in.

Sounds like a nice conflicting dynamic to start a series with! Perhaps: 'an independent young woman'? The term 'twenty- something' is a bit undecided. I'm not entirely sure if my next comment relates - being a series, but there is…
on After reading a page from a spell book an incorrigible boy discovers a cursed princess trapped in a tree in his backyard. He must break the spell and save his father from his new girlfriend, the Witch.

Awesome story! Great structure, very amusing, action packed. I want to see this film! Just tiny things- it'll be easier to read as one sentence and... Don't know how set you are on the adjective problematic. IMO, a problematic boy…
on Determined and short of money, a young boy aims to swim and fly to his dream paradise on the wildest island of Tasmania.

Why is almost every comment here marked with negative points? I am quite confused why nobody seems to agree with anything above?
on When a young boy concludes rising sea levels will sink his dream island Tasmania, he must engage all strength to swim and fly to his paradise before time runs out.

Is this the general consensus... The rising sea levels about to sink Tasmania is acceptable as the boy's fear, used to increase the stakes, but is not his main motivation for wanting to get there.
on Determined and short of money, a young boy aims to swim and fly to his dream paradise on the wildest island of Tasmania.

dpg- sorry can you clarify- which comment are you referring to? Thanks
on When a young boy concludes rising sea levels will sink his dream island Tasmania, he must engage all strength to swim and fly to his paradise before time runs out.

I don't know. What do other people think? As long as a character fully believes in what they have to do, the audience will too, or so I have heard. The boy truly believes Tasmania is about to sink after…
on Determined and short of money, a young boy aims to swim and fly to his dream paradise on the wildest island of Tasmania.

I see what you mean. Thank you for your comment. It has made me think. I wonder though it may be a different film & is not essential to my intention, which is to advertise Tasmania. The Spirit of Tasmania…
on When a greiving Art Director discovers that a evil new government innitiative, threatens his Film school., he must elliminate the agressors saving S.I.F.A.

I wonder if this could be improved by stating briefly what he has to do to eliminate the aggressors? I'm sure you've made what he must do to eliminate the aggressors something interesting, but 'eliminating the aggressors' could also be…