When Ex-SEAL Trent is drafted by a mysterious women to participate in a 2 day battle to the death against a team of Spetsnaz he must win if he is ever to return to his wife.

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sharkeatingman 0 pts

Good start using "When"; No need for protag name unless famous; "drafted by a mysterious woman" doesn't show much enough conflict. Try explaining up front about the reason why he has to fight (it invilves seeing his wife again, but why?). Also, the Spetsnaz. Cool word, but no one knows what it is.

Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

What's spetsnaz? A bottled water company?