When an illegal immigrant kills her sister, a misunderstood witch must stop the culprit from escaping back to her own land without paying for her crime.

by Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

I was re-reading some of my past loglines, this is an example logline I did for practice but wasn’t happy with it. This is my revision.

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Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

Thanks, this is actually a practice (Example) logline I revised for 'The Wizard of Oz'. I wrote it from the perspective of the 'Wicked Witch of the West', as a challenge.

JonnyW 6 pts

A good old revenge concept, one of my faves. An interesting hook too. It would make me curious to know more after reading this logline

Odie Samurai · 2,208 pts

This. Ha, it didn't dawn on me that I was following that yellow brick road lol.

dpg 112,231 pts

The Wizard of Oz, right?

Odie Samurai · 2,208 pts

The flow needs help brother, I found myself questioning who’s on first - maybe I just need another cup of joe 😉
Since Halloween is upon us let’s sprinkle some magic on this – what about this perspective?
A coven of witches is broken when her sister is killed and this witch sister seeks revenge before the killer escapes her magic realm.

Take care.