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Title: wrongful conviction
can someone come up with better word than payback? Maybe morals? She obviously doesn?t want a killer on the street, and she?s pissed she spent years working pro bono to get him out.?
Rewrite:
?When an idealistic attorney discovers the man she freed from prison - and later married - is a sociopathic killer, she sets him up for a murder he hasn?t yet committed.?
Thinking of adding the married part back in for further motivation, tension, and a reason why the characters are even around each other. Because normally a lawyer wouldn?t even be around an ex-client, and this way I can turn him into a violent abuser.
Thinking I?ll have her hide another victim that he?s beaten into an inch of her life, but my lawyer won?t succeed in that plan. She?ll eventually succeed in setting him up for her OWN murder and get away with his $$ and maybe a child. The child would provide that extra motivation to get the hell out and put him behind bars.
I like this a lot! I recommend very little: just pare it down a little to put more focus on the key points. The following is one word too long (you want to aim for 25 words), but tells the inciting incident and the stakes without being too specific.
When an idealistic attorney discovers the prisoner she freed is a cold-blooded killer, she must risk everything to put him back inside before he kills again.
It's a little clunky, in my opinion. The general plot you're conveying is good, but changing various words I think will give you something more strong and succinct. "Cold-blooded killer" could be replaced with "guilty" for example. The use of the word "chooses" seems to provide less of an antagonistic plot force, because it doesn't convey she's struggling to come up with a plan, but just bada-boom there's a plan. So if her coming up with a plan is really that simple, then I'd ax it because its not a major plot point. If the antagonistic force is executing the plan then that's what I'd focus on. Furthermore, how is wanting to put him back in prison, when he is in fact guilty, not ethical? Clearly, it must be because whatever her plan is is not ethical, but that's not super clear.
So: "When an idealistic attorney discovers the man she freed from prison is guilty, she struggles to execute a nefarious plot to put him back behind bars" would be my recommended logline.