When a prototype super-soldier goes rogue, he struggles to make his way home before the U.S. Army closes in and reclaims its property.

In addition to comments on the actual logline, is this a concept you’d be interested in watching? Thanks in advance for your feedback!

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fejumas 0 pts

I remember Dark Angel - saw the first 3 episodes and then lost interest. That was an interesting twist on the super soldier concept. I agree with your comment about providing a personal touch, and that's definitely something I want to emphasize in the actual script but haven't figured out how to incorporate into the logline. Thanks for your feedback!

Paul Clarke Samurai · 1,352 pts

I think SOLDIER is the sci-fi version, but UNIVERSAL SOLDIER is possibly even more similar. As you said, not necessarily a bad thing. It was a good enough idea to get made once (or twice), it should be good enough to get made again.

I think what they lacked, and what your logline lacks, is a personal touch. Give us some hint as to what type of man he is, why is he so hell bent on getting home, or what happens if he doesn't. Maybe his family is in danger. Does he have his memory from a former life? We've seen the super soldier a million times, give us an emotional reason to care about him.

Note: Just realised, it's also the same idea as DARK ANGEL. The James Cameron tv show staring Jessica Alba. That was a nice twist making the super soldier a young woman. It was a good premise, but the show went downhill from there.

fejumas 0 pts

Thanks for the comment, Geno. I always operate under the edict "give us the same, but different", so the challenge is to find that unique hook. So far, the concept is something along the lines of Six Billion Dollar Man meets First Blood. Have to do more research...