When a narcissistic property developer is convicted for murdering a government official, he must untangle the web of deceit, to prove his innocence

6 reviews

FFF Mentor · 7,850 pts

The original version is better, but the issues are there.
The word count means that you must choose the most valueable words, give the best details, the most useful details to give a picture of the whole story.

Sumi Logliner · 371 pts

Although there are many good comments about the original,? just my 2 cents worth...? the original logline reads better than the revised version.