When a humiliated teen gets the ability to see the desires of anyone he touches, he gets a shot at outmaneuvering the girl who brought him down.

I've left a response on your newest revision of this.

I've left a response on your newest revision of this.

While fantastic stories don't need an explanation for magic, they do need an inciting incident. ?And with the incident comes an implied switch ?or condition that will turn off the magic. ?Or a ?deadline, a ticking clock -- like in the fairy tale of ?Cinderella.

And the magic must be directly relevant to the plot, to the character's dramatic problem. ?Whatever the teenager visualizes must seem to be the solution to his problem. Initially that is, and then...

So in the logline, the magic should be defined in relation to the character's objective goal, the problem he needs to solve.