?Two uninspired and perpetually high film students document the final days of an emotionally destroyed detective, believing his demise will give their career the kick-start it needs.?

SunsetCoast thinks the detective does because the students are documenting "the final days of an emotionally destroyed detective."

While some of SunsetCoast's questions may not need to be in the logline, he is right to wonder who the main characters are. The students sound like they're the focus, but the detective sounds more interesting.

What's missing is the conflict, where things go wrong. What sends them off on the real adventure that they can't come back from. Alain_Alfaro is totally right, this is a great opportunity for a detective story with two unequipped students who inherit the case.

What makes you think the detective died, and if he did, do you think that's required or necessary in the logline?

It seems to me you are asking questions about the story that is not necessarily part of a logline.

But, then again, I could be wrong, which is why I posted it.

How did the detective die? Did the two uninspired students have anything to do with it or did they film it? How much are they involved in the detective's life and how did they meet him? Is this really a story about the detective with the students as incidental characters?