There?s something majestic about a Harley Davidson that deserves your respect, but there is something ominous about a large group of riders that demands your attention, and there?s a lot of power in that.

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Former member Penpusher · 20 pts

WDC- Yes. I agree with your observation.

Oh...it's a logline?

Former member Penpusher · 20 pts

Hey WDC,

You're not giving us any sense of what your story is about. I'm gleaning it involves Harleys and bikers, but that's about it. I suggest using the below template to craft a better logline. Cheers.

The logline is made up of the following components:
? the Hero?s function or job
? the story?s first major event or ?Inciting Incident? (optional)
? the Hero?s main goal in the story
? the Hero?s weakness and/or how it?s overcome (optional)
? the Antagonist or obstacle(s)
? the stakes (unless implied in the goal/obstacle)

Depending on the purpose of the logline, you will include less or more. The logline in its simplest formula is this: When [a major event happens], [the Hero], must [do the main action].