The son of a scientist is called to the future to solve the world?s oxygen crisis and save the woman he loves.

I agree with some of the others; I think lack of oxygen is perfectly credible. That being said, remember, it has to involve plant life to some degree, if not entirely.

Regarding the logline: it clearly lacks the information or the intensity that would make someone NEED to read this story. Placing equal emphasis on saving the future of mankind with "the woman he loves" is something I read a lot, and it just doesn't make sense to me (does he not have family, life-long friends, even a dog?) When you are talking about the extinction of mankind, I'm pretty sure his love life will be affected in some way! LOL...

To me, being the "son of a scientist" does not begin to describe the protag. You'll need to define him more dramatically, accurately and heroically.

Overall, the concept is interesting, and if the logline improves, it may just make someone important say "This I got to see! Let me read how he intends to accomplish this!"

Geno Scala- judge

correction: before millions suffocate :)

- Patrockable, Judge

I like it. "Oxygen crisis" is your hook... it had me curious about your future world...is breathable air $1.44 a cubic metre? Do they live in huge glass domes? :)

I agree with Nina and CaveDude21, tell us more about the main character (strength, flaw, occupation), and what he must do to stop the crisis. And you can leave out the love part, it's the B plot.

Also, what kind of sci-fi is it: action, drama, or comedy? At the moment, it's not too clear. Again, letting us know what the main character must do will help with this.

My crack at it:

"When a ::describe main character:: is transported to the future to solve Earth's oxygen/pollution crisis, he must ::do something::, before millions die."