SHORT: When a bank robbery goes wrong, a naive and desperate young man has 3 hours to retrieve the stolen money in order to save his grandmother?s life, while being chased by the entire police force of his small town.

by gmffr Logliner · 321 pts 1,529 views

3 reviews

Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts ★ Accepted

If he stole the money, why does he have to retrieve the money? I think an important story element is missing from the logline and it's leaving us a little confused.

gmffr Logliner · 321 pts

How about this ?

When a bank robbery goes wrong and his partner is caught by the police with the bag of money, a naive and desperate young man has 3 hours to retrieve the stolen money in order to save his grandmother?s life, while being chased by the entire police force of his small town.

gmffr Logliner · 321 pts

Alternative:When an old lady falls sick and in desperate need of an operation, her delinquent grandson decides to rob a bank. Complications arise when the robbery goes wrong, leaving him with only 3 hours to retrieve the stolen money while being chased by the entire police force of his small town.