Sent to evaluate the crew and staff of a new U.S. state-of-the-art nuclear submarine during its trial runs, the head of the U. S. DoD PsyOps Division discovers her vengeful ex husband has planted a computer virus to destroy her while on board. Will this deadly psychological war destroy everything?

by Presario2200 Penpusher · 180 pts 612 views

Titanic: D. S. V.

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KTMcIvor 0 pts

I get the general idea of the story but you need to be more precise and drop some of the detail. Shorten it up...for instance you may not need to include the division information, because a reader won't know what the heck that is or how to say it. Like myself. Tighten it up and try to make it just one sentence if at all possible.