Romantic comedy about two sex craved, sex addicts are sent to camp i the mountains for their reckless behavior. After escaping, lost, hungry and horny, they are forced to confront the reality behind their addictions.

Camp: Sex Addiction

2 reviews

Former member Penpusher · 20 pts

Try starting off with the line After escaping??. Good one

sharkeatingman 0 pts

Try starting off with the line "After escaping...". You should try to start loglines with active words, like "after", "when", "as", etc. I personally never include the genre in the logline either, because a well-done logline shuld automatically tell you the genre. Avoid repeating words, too. "Sex" is mentioned twice, and implied three other times.

With that in mind...
"After escaping a psychological detox camp, two lost and horny sex addicts must rely on each other to survive the elements, while controlling their voracious- but dangerous- cravings for intimacy."

It's not the best (it's not funny enough, really), but hopefully you get the idea. I'd work on ratcheting up the irony of the situation. As a concept, I think it has potential. Good job!