It sounds interesting mlenyesoe, but a couple of questions please:
- Did she attempt suicide while she was in the academy? Her being in a war is not in your logline, so it sounds like the academy broke her?
- What would we watch for the majority of your script?
This is what I can ?see? so far:
ACT 1: She is in trouble > She attempts suicide > She contemplates about what led her to that point.
ACT II: What?s next? As you can see ?stumbles through the reality of living? is vague.
- What is her goal? To get help for PTSD and have a family? To get revenge for the academy's wrongdoing?
- What is her opposition or conflict? Her disease? A drill Sargent?
- What are the stakes in your story? What happens if she doesn?t get help does she kill or finally kill herself?
Hope this helps.