Post suicide attempt, an intensely self-analytical young woman stumbles through the reality of living when she expected to be dead, whilst wryly reflecting on how her time in a military academy led her there.

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Odie Samurai · 2,208 pts

It sounds interesting mlenyesoe, but a couple of questions please:

  • Did she attempt suicide while she was in the academy? Her being in a war is not in your logline, so it sounds like the academy broke her?
  • What would we watch for the majority of your script?
    This is what I can ?see? so far:
    ACT 1: She is in trouble > She attempts suicide > She contemplates about what led her to that point.
    ACT II: What?s next? As you can see ?stumbles through the reality of living? is vague.
  • What is her goal? To get help for PTSD and have a family? To get revenge for the academy's wrongdoing?
  • What is her opposition or conflict? Her disease? A drill Sargent?
  • What are the stakes in your story? What happens if she doesn?t get help does she kill or finally kill herself?

Hope this helps.