Kidnapped and caged, ten people are going to be killed one at a time until they identify the two traitors in their group, which will secure their release.

I like the fact that you don't have one specific main character, I think that adds tension and mystery to the storyline and it's definitely something I would watch.

Hi guys thanks for the comments.

I?ll answer and give my logic and hope it gets more ideas from people.

Having no main character enables me to have the fate of the 10 truly up for grabs. If I had one main the viewers would know they are safe. I can make the audience care for someone than kill them. Never let the audience feel safe, make them panic as much as the characters.

The traitors are working with the kidnapper. They are part of the game, trying to get the group to turn on itself.

They are a group of completely random people, only one couple amongst them. Having ten of the same people gives me less scope, it is a bit monotone.

They are killed by a small explosive in a vest strapped to their chest. It is triggered remotely, so they can be punished for disobedience.

Let's check the 3 ingredients:

1. Event

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Kidnapped and caged...

So this is the event: The protagonist has been kidnapped and caged, along with 9 other people. Clear and cool.

2. Character

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... ten people...

There is no main character in the logline. There is a group, but I doubt that this is a plural-protagonist movie. I suggest you pick one of the group to be the main character.

Then comes AlHarper84's 3rd question, which is very important: What kind of group is it? Keeping it as "people" and "group" is a generic approach that fails to create a vivid mental image.

Instead of saying ten "people," use a more specific word:

• • ten United Nations officers
  • ten nuclear scientists
  • ten soldiers
  • ten game designers
  • etc.

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The word you choose defines the film's tone. For some reason, game designers brings a horror-comedy (or comedy-horror) to mind; soldiers sounds straight "And then there were none" kind of horror; nuclear scientists and UN officers is grimmer -it sounds as if it concerns the whole planet, giving the horror some political undertone.

3. Action

They must identify the traitor. This is cool. Some detective work involved. Some backstories revealed. I like it.

Two caveats, though:

1. 1. I would like to get a sense of what kind of betrayal there has been
   2. I don't see why they must be two traitors instead of only one.

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