In NYC, two dishonorably discharged soldiers must rescue the mother of a comrade they killed overseas from human traffickers…to reclaim their honor.

This is a very interesting idea. But what if they were not dishonorably discharged? What if they were honorably discharged, not held accountable for a friendly fire incident that they feel immense guilt for. This would give them more motivation to help the mother of their fallen comrade if the world sees them as heroes but they know the truth. Also, imagine if the mother doesn't know how her son died, and must be told after she is rescued. I think there's a lot more tension there with that one little change.

Indeed. I'm just working on maxing the word count.

Shorter is better. good premise. The rest is assumed or irrelevant.

Two dishonorably discharged soldiers must rescue the mother of a comrade they killed from human traffickers.

Thanks. I'm going for a "Butch and Sundance" kind of feel. The son was serving overseas along with the protagonist. I'll get it down to 25, I just need a minute.

I'm hooked. This logline has the basic ingredients: protagonist, motive, villain, objective goal, moral and objective stakes. I want to see this movie.

I have only 2 (minor) questions. Why 2 dishonorably discharged soldiers instead of 1? Did both shoot her son in the heat and fog of battle?

And: where do envision to be the country where her son was killed? The current logline is 23 words long so there's space to include that information.