In a futuristic crime-free world rendered paralyzed by digital addiction, an alcoholic policeman, repurposed to chase down individuals who have not met minimum social media popularity, must unravel the mystery behind his daughter?s kidnapping

6 reviews

maxzorin Penpusher · 146 pts

This is great feedback... and when to think of it, you're right... the kidnapping angle doesn't fit all that much with the setting.? I drew some inspiration from a mix of Fahrenheit 451, Logan's Run and The Men Who Knew Too Much... I'll come up with a better conflict an circle back...?Thanks again for your help.

Guillerson Logliner · 376 pts

Im totally agree with dpg, that world could be interesting but the conflict needs to be something original. In Minority Report he has to discover why himself is going to kill somebody, thats a conflict unique in that world.

Im also curious about the social media of the alcoholic policeman, does he has de minimun social media popularity?

As slappymctaco says i think it would be interesting to have people who cheat the system, maybe people who live out of the system, people who are rejected by society...the cheaters could also be the goverment...

Think deeply in the world, find a unique conflict that can explain by itself a lot of that society.

I sure there are good stories in that world! Godd luck!

slappymctaco Penpusher · 56 pts

I think that It is an amazing concept, but i think that it would be a lot more interesting to have some group who cheats the system.