Bubble Gum, used as a last minute fix on Apollo 13, causes the explosion in space, absorbs cosmic energy, and meteors to earth where townfolk begin vaporizing from its deadly radiation.

Gummed Up

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CatdFifth 1 pts

Hi there. Seems like you might have an interesting story, but the logline is very confusing. I suggest you reconstruct your sentence. What explodes, is it Apollo 13? What absorbs cosmic energy, the bubble gum or Apollo 13? What happens to the meteors? There's a missing verb there. Do the meteors crash to Earth, or explode in the Earth's atmosphere?

I hope that helps. Would d appreciate it if you could also comment on my logline.