?An art forgery investigator deciphers location of stolen diamonds using her brother’s diary that mysteriously appears at her doorstep. She embarks on a hunt for the treasure finding her family lost decades ago and the truth about her father who masterminded an international heist.?

3 reviews

Chris Andrews Penpusher · 35 pts

Sounds intriguing. I'd recommend streamlining it so it's a little less complicated. The logline is getting lost in the detail of the story.

Karel Segers Samurai · 615 pts

Hi Rafael,

Sounds great!

The inciting incident is when she finds the diary at the doorstep, right?

Perhaps rewrite the logline using the formula recommended here: How to write a logline.

I think you have the goods for an engaging story.?Now refine the logline!

I hope this helps.

Cheers,

Karel

Karel Segers Samurai · 615 pts

Hi Rafael,

Sounds great!

The inciting incident is when she finds the diary at the doorstep, right?

Perhaps rewrite the logline using the formula recommended here: How to write a logline.

I think you have the goods for an engaging story.?Now refine the logline!

I hope this helps.

Cheers,

Karel