After wrongly being convicted of a crime, three hundred years in the future, a former elite soldier is sent to an experimental prison camp on a distant moon, only to be drawn into a violent conflict between an ancient civilization and his fellow prisoners.

Distant Future

5 reviews

TX 0 pts

I like this concept, only you have to find a way to trim it up

bryson 0 pts

Your story is certainly a good one. Some snips and cuts where the others have suggested would improve your logline.

timmyelliot 0 pts

I'm thinking you might just get away with saying, "drawn into a violent conflict with an ancient civilization" and not really need the part about "fellow prisoners." (given that our protagonist is a prisoner, you've already sort of lead on that it's prisoner vs ancient civilization)