After ten people go missing a 5th grade prodigy tries to figure out the case

Six Flags Mystery

3 reviews

R J Penpusher · 10 pts

Hi, I think the idea would be more engaging if there were stakes outlined and if the character's flaw was explained. What sort of growth will the character experience, and how much time do they have. Keep it up. Stay well.

Richard Cosgrove 0 pts

A film with a 10 year-old detective has definite marketable possibilities as a children's film. But this logline leaves me wondering who the little detective will be going up against (include the antagonist), who vanished (other children? Parents?) and what makes the kid a prodigy (the kid could be a fabulous tennis player right now). The genre is also unclear: is this a serious thriller or a light-hearted kids' film?

Icebreed2006 0 pts

I think you can write a better logline. The logline is kind of bland at the moment. Why are these ten people important? I think you should also have an antagonist in the logline. You can do it!