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My idea for a Christmas Horror Short film I’ve had in development since the beginning of the year.
Originally: “After opening a mysterious present on Christmas Eve, a selfish little boy must repent for his actions or be devoured by a monstrous elf.”
UPDATE:
"After stealing a mysterious present from Santa's workshop on Christmas Eve, a selfish little boy must repent to the vengeful spirit of Santa's helper."
Thank you! I've been trying to figure out the clarity of the present as I rewrite whilst maintaining the monstrous elf within the logline standard.
Dig it.
Hard to envision this “mysterious present” so I drift in and out of the Family genre. Up the clarity on this present, we need to start hating on this selfish boy immediately e.g. Santa’s gift for his orphanage or Santa’s special gift for his disabled brother kind of thang. Whatever you go with tie your monstrous elf directly to it – I want to know this demon is the guardian of X and is hungry!
Keep it up! Take care.
Repent to the entity taking form of the elf who is haunting him for his act of stealing on Christmas.
His selfishness in wanting to open his presents early instead of following tradition.
repent to whom?; v/s being devoured by a monstrous elf, isn't that an obvious choice?
what's stopping him from repenting?