After 6 weeks of grieving, a 28 year old widow's family has decided she is coming home for christmas to 'get better', whether she likes it or not.

George Street

5 reviews

Former member Penpusher · 20 pts

Thanks for taking the time to comment. I understand the issue, and will work on it and come back. Thanks!

whitelady 0 pts

This would make a good Christmas story, and you have wonderful suggestions to improve your logline.

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

Having the widow coming home for Xmas is the family's goal. But she is the protagonist. So, what is her objective goal?

Who opposes that goal? What is at stake? That is, what does she expect to gain if she achieves her objective? What does she stand to lose if she fails?