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I agree with gmffr. The goal would be the lead character trying to avoid?being the next casualty, not him, thinking about how his death might affect everyone.
How about this:
After discovering the previous ruler was murdered, a?young impressionable man called by a manipulative enchantress to rule a kingdom must launch an investigation and avoid being the next casualty.
This one is kind of wordy in my opinion. Help on consolidating it, please.