A straight-laced rookie goes undercover to catch a gang of free-running thieves, but falls in love with their charismatic leader.

I really like the idea, but I haven`t seen Point Break.

Personally I`d base it in London, where jewelry theft from stores at night is prevalent, as the Police aren`t allowed to pursuit the moped scooter`s they use to get away. That and the spectacular backdrops at night, and the gritty locations.

As a filmmaker I can tell you now though, that getting the Health and Safety, plus Ethics forms passed would be near impossible. Without a massive budget for netting/airbags, stuntmen and Stunt co-ordinaters - Basically what I`m saying is make this script spectacular, I mean OMG Awesome - Or ditch it now.

Personally I`d really like to film this idea, so I wish you luck.

N.B. A ridiculed rookie cop, determines to apprehend a gang of free-running jewelry thieves, only to fall for their charismatic female leader. What goes on under the covers, doesn`t stay undercover.

Thanks for your response Karel.

Aside from the fact that I'm writing it for the Indonesian market, and the thieves are free running enthusiasts (Parkour), I really don't know what sets this story apart from those just like it. I recognise that throws up some red flags, but it also hasn't stopped many, MANY films borrowing from this formula from selling and becoming big hits.

So, without writing my movie for me ... can you suggest what area I should be tackling to make it more gripping? Are the characters suggested arcs not compelling enough? Is Parkour just not different enough to surfing or illegal drag racing or one of the many other slight variations on sub culture that have made films work in the past?

What I'm saying is, I recognise the problem but don't know where to go from there ...

Hey GJI - free running specifies the sub culture they belong to. It's very similar to Parkour, and using this the thieves are robbing jewellery stores in the middle of shopping malls. But I might need to find a way to make that clearer to the reader. Thanks.