A mentally & physically abused teen witnesses the murder of his family. Now an Adult, he enacts revenge on the entire family responsible.

2 reviews

CraigDGriffiths Singularity · 20,463 pts

The only thing you need to add is some detail around the family responsible.

Being specific in a logline that explains a well worn genre, like revenge. But you do get some free brain power from the reader because we all know what a revenge story looks like.

The abuse adds to the depth of imagine I conjure when reading a logline.

Douglascgilbert Penpusher · 91 pts

How does the mental and physical abuse relate to the murdered family or the murdering family?

The concept sounds interesting, but familiar, and a special twist would make it juicy.