A man is accused by a fortune teller of being guilty of a series of crimes, which have not yet been committed; and what seemed like a bad joke turns into a nightmare when the police arrive looking for him, considering him the main suspect in a murder. Now he must flee to prove his innocence, before another death occurs.

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5 reviews

Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

I wish there was an 'edit' button. (Because I am more of a re-writer than a writer)
Here is what I probably should have written.

“When he's accused by a fortune-teller of a murder he's yet to commit, a mild-mannered accountant must prove his innocence when the murder occurs and he's the prime suspect.”

Lee Tolley 26 pts

Hi Oscuro,

I feel this would benefit by bring fully into present tense.. i.e fleeing to prove his innocence before another death occurs.

oscuro escriba 23 pts

Hola Richiev, gracias por tu lectura! veo 2 ausencias: 1) el descreimiento del contador cuando recibe el vaticinio, que me parece importante porque plantea una visión vital, y 2) que es una serie de asesinatos, lo que significa que otro crimen va a cometerse.

Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

"When he is accused by a fortune-teller of a murder he has not yet committed, a mild-mannered accountant must prove his innocence when the murder actually occurs and he becomes the main suspect by the authorities."