Lee Tolley

Recent reviews

• on After the death of his twin sister, a struggling teen slips into a fantasy world of denial. Taking on a mythic adventure, the ensuing clash of values with local tyrant businessman, resolves a 40-year-old mystery at the heart of his communities suffering.

  Thanks Richiev This is very close to the inner journey of the character, so archetypally yes all of the above. I am seeing the tyrant businessman in the fantasy world as a drug warlord. a lynchpin of crime, prostitution, human…

• on 17 year old twin, Deighton Young needs to negotiate his last year of school while grieving for his recently drowned brother. Dropping out of school due to grief he is forced by his father to work for white collar criminal Harry Mackay, in doing so he uncovers unethical business practice leading back to resolving a multi-generational mystery surrounding the disappearance of Lani Drum 40 years earlier.

  Thanks for your feedback dpg .. reduce and refine .. got it

• on A man is accused by a fortune teller of being guilty of a series of crimes, which have not yet been committed; and what seemed like a bad joke turns into a nightmare when the police arrive looking for him, considering him the main suspect in a murder. Now he must flee to prove his innocence, before another death occurs.

  Hi Oscuro, I feel this would benefit by bring fully into present tense.. i.e fleeing to prove his innocence before another death occurs.