A high-end thief must execute an impossible heist to prove she didn’t murder her entire team before her crime boss father hunts her down.

4 reviews

Odie Samurai · 2,208 pts

For me, on this site, I take two approaches - take a stab at the logline based on what's there or workshop the thang. In this case, my questions were honest as I was unable to focus your plot points. But I get it and your response is fair, there are always folks on here looking for low-hanging story fruit :)

I wish you the best, take care.

Julien Perrottet Penpusher · 28 pts

Odie, thanks for taking the time! I'm not sure if either of those questions needs to be answered in the logline. I think the fact that you're asking the questions indicated that I've delivered enough of a hook to get you to go and see it ha..maybe. If I answer the first question we are looking at unraveling a complex plot point and I answer the second I'm delivering too much detail. All this said I will go away and think about how it might look with those questions answered. Thanks again.

Odie Samurai · 2,208 pts

1. How is performing a crime proof that she didn't commit murder?
2. What is this impossible heist?

Keep going, take care.