A dynamic young woman (witness and rescuer) and a reporter of the National Geographic (safe passenger) meet on the scene of a train crash. Over the course of seven days, while the disaster consequences fade and despite the increasing hostility of her father, they grow closer up to a bond; then a lasting union while her father will be won over under pressure from her maid and confidante.

ALICE ASHTON 2 ?(USCO # TXu 1-805-195 – WGAW #1566261)

28 reviews

Jean-Marie Mazaleyrat Penpusher · 4 pts

Hi Tony,

I think that "DEMAIN JE ME TUE" is a good story. What I know about it is that it is inpired from a real story of collective suicide in Japan, several years ago. BLuecat is one of the most serious contests.
I don't know if it is on the way to be produced.

About me, I have no feedback for now from people who have asked me for my logline (3 producers and one director).
Maybe hoping to see Alice Ashton on screen increased from 1 chance in 10.000 to 1 in 500 chance?
Wait and see ...

Do you subscribe to feedback when you enter a contest ?
I do, and it helped me to improve this story. I started in March 2012 and I rewrote a lot of things before entering Screenplay Festival in May. Alice Ashton entered five contests last year ( Page, Nicholl, Cynosure SF and Bluecat). An other good help was the feedback from my proofreader translator.
And also, if your first reader is interested by your story, it is a good luck.

Since then, I still have rewritten a lot. If I had no response about my logline, i'll enter some more contests this summer (Bluecat + others)

Reading what I wrote in the spots above, I see a lot of mistakes (grammar, spelling,...) I apologize!

Kind regards.

Former member Penpusher · 20 pts

Thanks Tony,

For now, I have no feedback from people who have asked me for my logline (3 producers and one director).
Maybe hoping to see Alice Ashton on screen increased from 1 chance in 10,000 to 1 in 100 chance?
Wait and see ...

Reading what I wrote above, I see a lot of mistakes (grammar, seppling,...) I apologize!

Former member Penpusher · 20 pts

I agree with you on DEMAIN JE ME TUE -- If I was a Reader and saw this logline I would not want to know more, and if someone posted it on here I'm sure it would get a fair amount of criticism...

I'd be interested to know if it's on the way to being produced (?) -- as from what I know on competitions the chances of this happening are not actually that high. You are obviously an exception though, as your screenplay has had some success in a competition and you have some wheels in motion -- gives me some hope for myself on that front as I had pretty much discounted competitions.

For me, a logline would be used to send to Agents and Prod Co's that accept unsolicited query's -- If they dig it then usually the next step is you get to send a synopsis, and only after that do you have a shot at getting a screenplay read (most won't accept full scripts unsolicited -- the 'gold rush' days of spec scripts sounds like it's long gone...) -- again, I'm definitely in the 'Up and Coming' basket -- having not produced so much as a short -- but here's hoping one day...;)

Lastly -- I'm not one for logline contests -- it's one of the best things about this site IMO -- everyone is here (most of the time, anyway) to help each other out as opposed to compete.

Many kind regards :)