A detective struggles to find his partner?s killer uncovers other murders and two dirty cops on his trail and the possibility it was an inside job.

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Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts

Consider restructuring the logline so it starts with the inciting incident and finishes on a clear goal. You describe the MC's descovariesin the story but not the MC's actions and goals.

Also, posibilities should be left out of a logline - either it was an inside job or it wasn't. Best to be more definitive with story elements in a logline than indicative.

For example:
After his partner is killed, a detective uncovers a plot by dirty cops and must prove their guilt to stop another murder.