A dangerous love affair between a photojournalist and a black market smuggler set against the June 2001 massacre of the Royal Family in Nepal.

MONSOON

6 reviews

SLClibra 0 pts

It may be my ignorance talking, but I dont get what the background has to do with anything. The journalist could be running arond Nepal for a number of reasons. Why is the coverage of an assasination such a big deal in that world and have such an impact on their love affair.

dpg 112,231 pts

A statement of a premise but not a logline.

wilsondownunder 1 pts

Hello again,

Who is the protagonist? The photojournalist or the smuggler? I assume journalist. Perhaps focus on the protagonist and tell us more about the relationship.

Immediately I'm wondering:

Why the journalist would want to be with someone working within the realm of the black market.

Why is it dangerous (aside from the obvious link to the black market and political turmoil) - who is the antagonist I suppose making it dangerous for this particular character?

What's the goal of your protagonist - other than some good ol' lovin?

Answering some of these questions in your longline will help the reader see your film in a snapshot.

Good luck.