The true life misadventures of a couple who try to save their failing marriage and reignite their dull sex life and relationship by daringly moonlighting as an ?escort duo? and experiencing the fantasies of others.

We LOVE this one dpg - THANK YOU!!!!!

How about something like:

The true life misadventures of a couple who, while trying save their failing marriage, accidentally rediscover the joy of sex in their relationship when they become an 'escort duo' fulfilling the sex fantasies of others. (35 words)

[Notes:
"True life" -- this really happened, folks. Part of the sizzle that sells the steak.

"Misadventures" rather than adventures to suggest the comedy in the premise. More sizzle.

This version attempts to put the spotlight as much on your relationship as the adventures because, for the long haul, it's the relationship chemistry -- more sizzle- between you two that has to carry the story, whether feature film or series.]

fwiw

Again GREAT advice! I edited the above just to share ONE anecdote...

Furtherless:

While I'm not yet sure as to what the logline should include for your story, I am fairly sure what it should not include. "Changing thousands of lives and saving many marriages along the way." probably ought to be dropped out.

Why? Because it's giving away the ending. A logline should make people wonder how it will all work out, but it should never tell them. Raise an implied question, yes, but don't answer it.

Again, consider, the logline for "Breaking Bad". It would never say how the saga of Walter White is going to play out, like "When a law-abiding chemistry teacher is diagnosed with a fatal cancer, he decides to cook meth to earn enough money to pay for treatment and provide for his family after his death which he succeeds in doing but in the process causes the death of innocent people, loses his soul and all the people he loves."

A treatment for a feature film beats out a story that concludes with a denouement: story lines conclude, conflicts are resolved. End of story. FADE OUT

A treatment for a series pilot beats out a story that concludes with a cliffhanger: story lines are developed but not concluded. Conflicts are set up but not resolved. The audience is left wondering and wanting to know what happens next. FADE OUT Tune in next week to find out.

A film treatment ends with a period. A series treatment ends with an exclamation point (surprising reveal, a suspenseful twist) and a question mark (what happens next?)

A treatment serves the purpose of providing producers with evidence that there is enough dramatic material to warrant going to the next step which is to invest time and serious money in development. (Like hiring a professional screenwriter to write a script.)

Tony Edward and dpg, you're both AMAZING and thank you both for your fantastic advice, suggestions, and the time you take to write them :)

So, here's what's happening...

We've received a lot of press lately for our Sex Coaching services, including interviews by salon.com, Marie Claire, Maxim Magazine, a piece on FOX5, an article in the NYPost, and we were featured on Jenny McCarthy's XM show, "Dirty, Sexy, Funny," all of which has gotten the attention of several production companies hoping to secure the Life Rights to our story. Some have proposed docu-series, others a cable series, and yet others have proposed a feature film.

Most interestingly, it has been our FaceBook page which has garnered even MORE attention - you'd think that when certain folks see "TabooCouple" that they'd shy away from it, however... We basically have a "Who's Who" list of "Friends" in the entertainment industry. We connected there with several award-winning producers, directors, etc., among them, Tony Award-winning producer, David Garfinkle (Spider Man: Turn Off The Dark, GHOST, A Gentleman's Guide to Love and Murder, and dozens of TV productions). David is now our manager and legal consultant (he started off by running his own entertainment law firm).

Anyway, the challenge for ME (Rob - my wife's name is Bianca) arose when I was asked repeatedly for a "Treatment" - which I had NO IDEA what it even meant. I went online and researched, found a few examples, and put one together. I think I did pretty well in breaking the story down into a 3 Act structure; but, as you guys have pointed out, the freaking LOGLINE is what's KILLING me!

Here's the thing: I was assuming that Sex Coaching itself is pretty boring - there are TENS of THOUSANDS of people working in this capacity (thanks in part to Pornification); however, there are ZERO Sex Coaches or even PHd therapists with the PRACTICAL knowledge we gained through our unorthodox erotic journey - in a list of all the practices whereupon PRACTICE trumps reading books or attending seminars, SEX would be #1 (at least in our opinion). So, that's why I figured the CORE of the story would be our JOURNEY to become what are perhaps the most knowledgable Sex Coaches in the world (pardon the hyperbole, but... even a few well known Sex Therapists with impressive resumes and schooling have admitted this to us).

And dpg, indeed our experiences have often been HILARIOUS. This was all due to the fact that English is my wife's 4th language - think "Gloria" in Modern Family - so she often misinterpreted potential client's desires. In one instance, she somehow interpreted a man's desire "to have rough sex with a woman while another man watches" to mean that "I want to be tied up, beaten, and tortured by a demon-possessed dominatrix while her slave watches.? She ended up tying me up to a giant lamp in the corner of a hotel room after having gagged me and stripped me of my clothes. She then turned her "rage"/attention towards the confused man cowering in the other corner of the hotel room, gags HIM, strips him of his clothes, places a collar around his neck announcing him as a "SUB," then walks him around the room on a leash like a dog, rides him like a pony, until finally strapping him spread-eagled to the hotel bed and beats him senselessly with a flogger. Mind you, at the time she was the one that monitored emails, etc., so when I saw her researching ways to be the PERFECT "Domme" and she explained that we were going to have our first BDSM session, I was a bit excited but also CLUELESS to what this man had actually requested. We didn't discover the mistake until we read the review the man posted about his experience on the Yelp for this type of "thing." He actually described it as the most erotic experience of his life despite never knowing he was ever into BDSM, but warned, "Be VERY careful of what you request of Bianca as she seems to misinterpret things, in this case in an EXTREME way." This was her first such error, but not the last... I eventually HAD to take over email monitoring duties. Anyway, sorry for the long prose, but I enjoy writing about our adventures :) So,...

Another thing now that you guys mentioned it: Is a Treatment for a feature film different for one for a cable series? Google SUCKS to find this out...

Humbly appreciative for your time and assistance, like, TRULY!

Rob (and Bianca)