A closed-off artist tries to leave her old life behind without attachments, when an anonymous one-night stand goes hilariously wrong and the protective wall around the painful memory, isolating her, begins to crack.

(existing script, romantic comedy)

4 reviews

Jessie Samurai · 1,951 pts

I think I know how to approach it.
I’ll need to leave the script alone for the most part, but more cards on the table with the logline.
Got it, thank you! 😁🙏

Jessie Samurai · 1,951 pts

That would be an interesting movie! 😁👏
I’ll need to adjust to an existing script. Nice and crisp though, thank you! Can use that as a template.

Rutger Oosterhoff Logliner · 930 pts

Ok, I get it this is what we call a Tragicomedy.

When the one-night stand of a formerly abused artist goes hilariously wrong, she decides to front-on face her fears by doing stand-up comedy.

Odie Samurai · 2,208 pts

Your artist has issues, but I am unable to glean why she’s hurt – thus I cannot fully grasp her psychology. Why was this one-night stand hilarious? It reads like this one-nighter positively impacts her life, but I am unable to connect how this stranger helps her “tear down the wall”.

BTW: An artist’s medium speaks volumes e.g. While bodypainting a nude model thing’s get hot – you get the idea.

Hope you find this constructive, take care.