A carefree college student attempts to host a huge party for his friends during the initial days of a zombie outbreak.

Ok.

Icebreed2006:

I have come to have a totally different take of your story, it seems. But it's your story, so I know what else to say. Except suggest that you rewind the thread and review the basic building blocks of your logline.

What is the inciting incident? (The party can be the scene of the inciting incident, but I just don't see how it can be the incident that triggers the rest of the plot.)

As a result of the inciting incident, what must the protagonist do -- or else?
Is there a ticking clock?
Is there a stakes character?

* Another antagonistic human force.

Good point raised! Maybe I can find antagonistic human force for my story.

Oh. Now it seems to be a very different story than the one conjured up by your previous posts.

IMHO: "Police using the outbreak as an avenue to openly abuse their power" is a tried and trod plot path populated by the usual suspects. It doesn't hook my interest as a fresh, original perspective on the zombie genre.

Others mileage may vary.

dpg: I greatly appreciate the constructive criticism you have been giving me. Its tough writing screenplays. I want the story to be structurally sound before I begin to write the screenplay. The story will also deal with the breakdown of law and order. Police using the outbreak as an avenue to openly abuse their power.