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Right again! "Based on real events near the end of the second world war in Burma, an enemy artillery station has severed aerial supply routes, forcing a narrow-minded co-pilot to deploy an unconventional weapon on the station."

DPG- This story is based on my father's service as a pilot flying prototype AWACs planes in Burma during WWII, however, the protagonist is the co-pilot. Ninety percent of the script is historically accurate.

This is harder than I thought it would be. Considering the advice from each of you, I hope this iteration is better than the last: "Near the end of the second world war in Burma, an enemy artillery station has…

Am I still clueless or am I getting closer? "Near the end of the second world war, on a spy mission over Burma, a cynical co-pilot banks on unconventional tactics to save his crew."

Nir I'm confused by your review. I would respond by stating that: The discovery of the station's location is the inciting incident, The protagonist is clearly the pilot, His character flaw that threatens his goal is his behavior, His objective…

You each make excellent points, however Eathan correctly ?deduced that I should have used the adjective "brash" to describe my protagonist's overly confident, insubordinate attitude. I currently have almost thirty versions of the logline and still haven't nailed it. But…