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"An 86 year old man relives his past lives through hypnotic regression, but in one fateful session, a blurry vision shows him his possible next life and that his current one is about to end soon and the strange man from an unknown agency has to make the toughest moral decision."
Not quite what is actually happening, but I like it.
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Two cross country gun-runners hit and kill a strange old woman with their disguised 18- wheeler. They soon figure out something strange about the woman as she has cursed them to drive across a dark, twisted reality of the world that they once knew.
I actually like your better, thanks. I would change the DARK THINGS part, sounds too vague. "When two gun-runners hit and kill an old gypsy, they become cursed into a twisted reality and must discover how to escape before the…
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Desperate for his father?s approval, a conceited journalist takes a job at his small town newspaper. But when he discovers a drug scandal brewing within the local football club, he pursues the story even though it will implicate his athlete brother.
It does sound better, smoother. Just don't turn it into a mathematical equation, by going too far. You've definitely got it down. It would make a great TV GUIDE description and that's kind of what they're looking for. The original…
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Desperate for his father?s approval, a conceited journalist takes a job at his small town newspaper. But when he discovers a drug scandal brewing within the local football club, he pursues the story even though it will implicate his athlete brother.
Here again, you're assuming the plot. Or giving suggestion on what would work better. Let's assume the work is already completed and we're now making our log line to send to whoever we're going to send it to. Your suggestion…
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"A reckless cop suspects his clean cut partner is actually an off duty vigilante. Upon investigation he discovers his partner is part of a bigger conspiracy and question his own morales by bringing his partner to justice"
I've adjusted it
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"A reckless cop suspects his clean cut partner is actually an off duty vigilante. Upon investigation he discovers his partner is part of a bigger conspiracy and question his own morales by bringing his partner to justice"
Definitely no Act 3 information, but then most of these loglines I've been reading don't. And if it was given to you there's no follow up interest by someone wanting to finance or know more about your idea or your…
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"An 86 year old man relives his past lives through hypnotic regression, but in one fateful session, a blurry vision shows him his possible next life and that his current one is about to end soon and the strange man from an unknown agency has to make the toughest moral decision."
I think it's very clear who's who in this. Just because someone has to make a decision doesn't mean they're the protagonist. We're trying to peak the interest aren't we? I put it into the readers mind that a decision…
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"A reckless cop suspects his clean cut partner is actually an off duty vigilante. Upon investigation he discovers his partner is part of a bigger conspiracy and question his own morales by bringing his partner to justice"
Brevity? really? Have you seen some of the other loglines on here? Maybe I'm thinking this is too much of a grab the interest type of thing. I may be trying to grab the reader without giving too much of…
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A week before Christmas terrorists invade the North Pole and take Santa hostage, and the only cop that can save him hates Christmas more than Ebenezer Scrooge.
Love it! It would make a good adult oriented CGI animated film...and I don't mean porno.
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Al Qaeda unwittingly recruit Inspector Clouseau for their Final Mission.
Is that a "Bumb" in your hands?
