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Taking on warring Texas drug cartels, a female Iraq war vet of color, a teenage hunk from the feed store, and a cattle dog, come to the aid of a neighbor who\'s son has been kidnapped.

May 20, 2012

on Taking on warring Texas drug cartels, a female Iraq war vet of color, a teenage hunk from the feed store, and a cattle dog, come to the aid of a neighbor who\'s son has been kidnapped.

Some posters here have been applauding intriguing, but totally mysterious loglines, so Ieft. Now that people have come to their senses, I'm back. I've been getting synopsis reads with: "Taking on warring Texas drug cartels, two rancher women (an Iraq…
on Taking on warring Texas drug cartels, a female Iraq war vet of color, a teenage hunk from the feed store, and a cattle dog, come to the aid of a neighbor who\'s son has been kidnapped.

Thanks. My point is, if the plot is not something someone is interested in, it's good to know up front so making the logline as intriguing but mysterious as possible is not a good way to go in my opinion.…
on Taking on warring Texas drug cartels, a female Iraq war vet of color, a teenage hunk from the feed store, and a cattle dog, come to the aid of a neighbor who\'s son has been kidnapped.

Okay, thanks, SharkEatingMan. Actually the logline I posted was from IMDB. The one you offered here tells the story well, but would it get the script read? Only if a producer were interested in a football movie which it was.…
on Taking on warring Texas drug cartels, a female Iraq war vet of color, a teenage hunk from the feed store, and a cattle dog, come to the aid of a neighbor who\'s son has been kidnapped.

The Blindside: A homeless, oversized and under-educated African-American teenager is taken in by a well-to-do white family.? Notice how absolutely nothing about 'football' (a huge draw for that film) is mentioned. I recently read a script consultant's web site that…
on A unpredictable woman wanders into the live of an unconventional and disillusioned psychiatrist, by giving up her identity she start them off on a profound journey to comprehend the meaning of her live. With his help she finds her answers and leaves him with his own questions.

Use "An" before a word starting with a vowel. I think you mean "life" not "live". Is English your second language?
on Outside (Sitcom TV Series)

This is a good example of the confusion about how much to reveal in a logline. This one is interesting, yet reveals little about the premise, inciting incidents or anything but that there are two characters solving crimes. Many script…
on After a twisted psychopath is murdered, an evil entity targets the current lineage of those responsible to husk, and kill them to sate his revenge.

So the murdered psychopath's 'entity' (meaning spirit or ghost) is a skin harvester? Does he make lamp shades?
on After a twisted psychopath is murdered, an evil entity targets the current lineage of those responsible to husk, and kill them to sate his revenge.

"an evil entity targets the current lineage of those responsible to husk" -- Say what? Is this about a corn borer going after genetically modified corn (GMO)? So.. the murdered guy is an entity - - a spirit or a…
on Taking on warring Texas drug cartels, a female Iraq war vet of color, a teenage hunk from the feed store, and a cattle dog, come to the aid of a neighbor who\'s son has been kidnapped.

According to "The Chicago Manual of Style", this is the proper sentence: "Taking on warring Texas drug cartels, two cowgirls (an African-American Iraq war vet and an ex-NYC fashion model) have 72 hours to save a son from kidnappers." There…
on Taking on warring Texas drug cartels, a female Iraq war vet of color, a teenage hunk from the feed store, and a cattle dog, come to the aid of a neighbor who\'s son has been kidnapped.

That was it -- the impression I meant to make in one sentence.

Taking on warring Texas drug cartels, a female Iraq war vet of color, a teenage hunk from the feed store, and a cattle dog, come to the aid of a neighbor who\'s son has been kidnapped.