captainryannn

Hard to tell who the protagonist is here. If it's the husband, I would maybe consider including something within the logline that might make him redeemable. The "Make a decision" part is a little vague and could use a bit…

As already noted, the added stakes suggested presents a lot more immediacy to the story. How do these drawings control her? What might a child be distressed about? Perhaps those could be worth touching on in the logline as well.…